opening sequence pitch feedback

for our presentation we received quite a lot of feedback, this all being constructive criticism. we had got told to put our work more in depth as it isn't constructed that well. also we got told to improve on our detail of the script and all the characters. in order to show how were going to improve we are going to do another presentation

Opening Sequence Pitch

preliminary task

production logo

this is the production logo which has been created for out movie sequence. this will be shown during the title sequence.

man trying to fight psychological demons in his head to find its a never ending battle he cannot win

start of the film, a man starts freaking out as he starts seeing figures in weird places this makes him wonder why this is happening

in the middle of the film, the man goes to see some psychiatric centre to see what's wrong with him, he finds out that he has mental problems doing with supernatural things going on so 

at the end of the film, the man is still trying to fight his demons and cannot carry on fighting so he decides not to fight them anymore and takes his life, as you see him on the floor you see the figure standing over him.

script for plot

main character wakes up

looks outside

sees figure

walks away then turns back and looks again

figure disappears

turns round and makes his way downstairs

goes to kitchen

phone rings he answers it, says "hello"

phone cuts off

walks away and phone rings again

answers phone again says "hello"

mate replies saying "you alright mate its jack"

main character replies "sweet jack what you doing?"

mate replies "nothing much"

main character replies saying "well if you want come round?"

mate says "yeah when shound i come round"

main character replies saying "whenever you want"

mate says "alright ill be round in a bit" *hangs up phone*

main character turns to kitchen gets food out and turns round to see figure by the window

decides to run away into room

door bell goes off

walks to door and opens it

mate standing at door walks in

main character then says "jack you dont know whats just happened!"

jack says "why whats happened?!"

main character then says "as i woke up i looked out my window and saw someone standing by the lamp post, i turned my back for one second and he was gone!, then after i got off the phone to you i got some food out my cupboard and turned around to see him standing by my window!"

jack says "oh shit! what we gunna do?!"

main character says "i have no idea"

scene ends

Casting crew for plot

the casting crew will feature:
1 man as main character
1 man as friend who enters the house
and 1 man who plays the figure who is following the main character

main plot chosen

me and my partners have all came together to choose a plot which we will use my first plot. we have chosen this plot because we feel we could perform this to the best of our abilities.
the storyboard of the plot is:

casting crew for plot 2

casting crew: 1 girl for the main character in the opening sequence
1 man who is laying in the floor in blood

second plot storyboard

second plot idea

another plot we could use for our movie sequence could be a girl sitting in a corner crying with voices shouting and tormenting her in the background, then you see a camera shot showing her father laying on the floor dead with blood coming from his head and afterwards a close up is taken of the girls face wiping the tears away and looking angry and mad.

first plot storyboard